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Okie dokies, i've been working on this for the past like 5 hours now. Its all my own work. What do you guys think about it so far? (Btw, that probobly isnt the real chorus, i'm most likely going to use a different instrument or sound for it) (chorus is at the end btw >_< )

http://www.supload.com/listen?s=RkJCNP

Not bad, not bad. It sounds like you may have used Fruity Loops (?) just a guess.

If I may provide some constructive criticism, you may want to make it a bit less repetitive in the beginning. I feel like I'm still waiting for the song to start 20 seconds in (which would be ok if it was fading, "Where The Streets Have No Name" by U2 does it perfectly). 

It also seems a bit like you're just stacking instruments on top of each other until you get to that cool part in the middle. Otherwise, good start! (assuming you're adding more to it).

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Yup, FL 9. And thanks for the criticism. i have thought about if i want to fade the song in or just bash it all together real quick. and i do plan on changing the chorus instruments. and my friend is gonna write some vocals for me and her to sing a duo on it. she said im gonna rap and she's gonna do the real singing lol

Oh gawd, Lol, you're going to rap? You better be black, I hate guys that act black.

microchip posted: (28th Jun 2010 05:53 pm)

Oh gawd, Lol, you're going to rap? You better be black, I hate guys that act black.

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epicnoob posted: (28th Jun 2010 05:57 pm)

microchip posted: (28th Jun 2010 05:53 pm)

Oh gawd, Lol, you're going to rap? You better be black, I hate guys that act black.

Honestly if u dont got nothing nice to say dont say sh!t then.

U dont have to be black to be able to rap.

Havent u seen eminem hes white, and wow he knows how to rap better than some black guys.So either next time give helpful critizism or just dont say anything at all.

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Very nice keep up the good work

ITT: People trying to act black.

Haha should've seen that one coming, nah im not going eminem rap or black person rap, my friend said shes making it more along the lines of the Linkin Park's Mike Shinoda rap, hahah. but yea, i too feel like white rappers are a little weird, HELL i feel weird for telling her "Sure i'll do therapping!" XD but she's the best singer i've ever seen no joke so if i sound weird she would pick up after me i guess lol

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And oh yea, it is a hard to use FL 9. I tried looking up a SIMPLE tutorial throughout the entire internet and it never showed a damn thing related to it lol, so i was forced to read through the fucking manual!! (NoooooOO) but now i got the hang of all the simple stuff.

Kazzooey posted: (29th Jun 2010 01:17 am)

Haha should've seen that one coming, nah im not going eminem rap or black person rap, my friend said shes making it more along the lines of the Linkin Park's Mike Shinoda rap, hahah. but yea, i too feel like white rappers are a little weird, HELL i feel weird for telling her "Sure i'll dotherapping!" XD but she's the best singer i've ever seen no joke so if i sound weird she would pick up after me i guess lol

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And oh yea, it is a hard to use FL 9. I tried looking up a SIMPLE tutorial throughout the entire internet and it never showed a damn thing related to it lol, so i was forced to read through the fucking manual!! (NoooooOO) but now i got the hang of all the simple stuff.

Did you take lessons from the guy that wrote the music to Ninja Gaiden on the NES? Skip to 1:45 to hear what I am talking about in this video link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aRLqwsXebHQ&feature=related

heeey wait a second, that sounds familiar.... (the answer is no btw lol) and how the fuck did you stumble on to this? XD

I have forgotten more music than you will probably ever know. I majored in music in college. Way back in the day (probably when you were in diapers) I used to play old video game music on my keyboard for fun. Opening cinema music from Ninja Gaiden was epic back then. Anyway, it is not uncommonfor music to sound similar. Listen to some country music and here the I-IV-V(or V7)-I chord progression. :P

If you are into popular music, then maybe I-V-vi-IV-I is your thing. See the link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i4_f6pfabQk&feature=related

Yes, i have heard it, (Dont stop believing = effing MASTERPEICE) lol. but anyways, i wasnt even thinking about much music theory when it came to this song, i stumbled onto that little sound with the guitar on my own guitar. lol i was trying to remember how to play The Day that Never Comes and i got it wrong and got that. then i played that on FL 9 and it turned out pretty nice imo.

Why dose he have to be black to rap..Stop being Stereotype and Go get Eminem's new Album.

Nice. Pretty good for your first.

2 years ago?

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